I am a Year 8 student at Edmund Hillary School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Room 10 and my teacher is Peta. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Tena koe Nathaniel and Kaiva this is Ellakaye here. I really love this descriptive writing on dogs at the beach. I love how you have made a begging,middle and end for the planning. I also love how this story is not super long, instead it's just a quick and short story. What a wondeful story, keep up the good work!
Hello Nathaniel and Kaiva this is Ema, Victoria and Emora. We found your story....interesting (the truth was told in this sentence). Maybe next time you should make your story more descriptive. :l
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Tena koe Nathaniel and Kaiva this is Ellakaye here. I really love this descriptive writing on dogs at the beach. I love how you have made a begging,middle and end for the planning. I also love how this story is not super long, instead it's just a quick and short story. What a wondeful story, keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteHello Nathaniel and Kaiva this is Ema, Victoria and Emora. We found your story....interesting (the truth was told in this sentence). Maybe next time you should make your story more descriptive. :l
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