I am a Year 8 student at Edmund Hillary School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Room 10 and my teacher is Peta. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Hello Nathaniel, This is Neha from Room 9. Your writing is good but maybe you should add more full stops instead of using and. I am just suggesting that you should write a little more and you should also describe what you felt. Keep up the good work.
Please structure your comments as follows: Positive - Something done well Thoughtful - A sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what they had to say Helpful - Give some ideas for next time or ask a question you want to know more about
Hello Nathaniel,
ReplyDeleteThis is Neha from Room 9. Your writing is good but maybe you should add more full stops instead of using and. I am just suggesting that you should write a little more and you should also describe what you felt. Keep up the good work.